Wednesday, August 23, 2017

Aug 23 update

I have read the following

The Galaxy Game

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This Book took forever to read. It wasn’t gripping and the language was verbose.  The author relies on the readers to have an undersigning of her world without much explanation. As a series that may be acceptable if the book is later in the series but this book is a stand alone. There was a lot of et up without much payoff. There was more telling than there was showing. There were vivid descriptions but the book lacked action. I was interested at one point in the uncontrolled skill but was disappointed that that skill was underrepresented in the book as a whole.

Tales of a Fourth Grade Nothing (Fudge #1)

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A fun and light book for children and adults alike.  The author writes a humorous tale full of lessons. These lessons however aren’t learned by peter rather they need to be taught by parents or teachers reading this book with children.  I was left wondering how a three-year-old got a turtle off a dresser multiple times? If he did it once why didn’t Peter look for a different home for the turtle?

A wonderful adventure story with a good flow of tension from many areas of Phillip’s life. Phillip’s change is gradual which makes it believable. The author does a great job of depicting the racial tensions at the time. The author does a great job of using descriptive languate that allows reader to experience all the sensations of all the locations of the book.  The climax is gripping and full of detail yet the pacing isn’t slowed.

Otherwise Known as Sheila the Great (Fudge #2)

A fun story written as if a young scared girl is telling it. The story arc followed the pattern well with constant tension that was serious for the girl and humorous to older readers.  Chapters were broken in places that always created tension and leads readers to want to keep going.  This is a strength of Judy Blume.  I do want to more about the dog situation and how that plays out. I hope that is addressed in future books in this series. It was confusing to jump from peter to Sheila but it was still a fun journey.

I’m working on the following
I’m still working on my historical screenplay.  Currently I’m grappling with how much time sub plots should take up of the typical 100 page screenplay.


In your experience in either writing or movie watching how much time do you think a screenplay should spend on sub plots?

Wednesday, July 19, 2017

July 19th update

I have read the following
            This book didn’t feature as many repetitions of the word teen as the previous book in this series I reviewed did.  This book read more naturally. For that reason it is more likely to maintain the attention of the readers the author wants to attract.  Chapters are short yet powerful making every word count.  An abundant appendix follows providing links to further readings in a variety of formats. 

            A horrifying tale beautifully written with powerful illustrations. Sax used limited words which makes each word that much more significant.  Words, images, and pages with few to no words speak volumes.  While the protagonist isn’t a real person the experiences described are.  A must read for children and adults. 

Hawksong (The Kiesha'ra #1)

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            This book has been on my to read list for a long time.  I’m thrilled that I got to it because it was a wonderful read.  I’m excited to get to read more. The Charaacters aer captivating, the lore is beautiful, and the plot is enthralling.  This book has great moral lessons for young ald old readers alike.

            A heartfelt crafted story which tells of the horrors of slavery in language all ages can grasp and hear without such graphic detail the book would deserve an R rating.  This fictionalized story allows readers to see into the live of slaves without giving children too harsh of a taste early on.  readers can read this story and make connections between this fictionalized character and what they have learned about slavery up to this pint as well as creating a sounding board for future history lessons.  The wood cut illustrations are a fabulous addition to this book.

I have worked on the following
I completed the first ten pages of my first screenplay which will be featured in this years annual Bits of Scrips program. Otherwise I have continued to work on personal development and revision. I revised an edition of The Adventures of Gwen and Brooke and submitted it to the Nebraska 150th anthology.
I’m working on the following

I’m continuing to work on my first screenplay with the placeholder title of The Otis Journey. I’d like to have it ready for submission for next year’s Omaha Film Festival however if it’s not ready I’m prepared to accept that I will have it ready for the submission deadline for next year.

Friday, May 12, 2017

May 12

I have read the following

             The author did present interesting and seemingly factual information.  Pinpointing legends and tales can be difficult. It is clear Trollinger did his research.  The way he chose to divide up chapters was inconsistent.  I would have preferred instead of blending reasonable explanation and the ghost story that he tell the legends or tall tales first then at the end of each section provide the context and possible explanations.  The way it was done however distracted from the haunting in a number of chapters.

            A fun story written for pre-teens.  This is an interesting fact considering I found this book tucked away in the adult section of the library.  A riveting story of a fourteen year old girl in the 1940’s who takes her past, present, and future into her own hands despite her plush lifestyle. Despite this books tendency to tell instead of show readers it was a riveting book even for an adult almost twice the protagonist’s age.  While I haven’t continued in the story yet I’m excited to see a wonderful saga of a girl told in manageable sized books for youth. 

            Book two starts off with a bang immediately where book one left off. This riveting tale seems to slow in comparison to book one however the themes are highly important.  Another homey book which deals with intense subjects without being too heavy.  Despite the high stakes this is a feel good book. The ending does seem farfetched, something you would only see in a religious fiction book.

            As is true for this series book three starts off with a character decision which seems not only out of character but highly unlikely unless shaped by an author.  One must rely on their fait to believe that a person would make such a decision so easily.  This book is filled with the most action in the series although it waits till the back third of the book.  Faith seems less farfetched in this book than the others.  Faith becomes less about getting what one wants and becomes more of a comfort and a place of self discovery.  Despite the higher stakes for others’ that aren’t just Allison the book remains true to its predecessors and contuse to be a feel-good story.

            Following all the high stakes of the previous books the angst that this book begins with becomes tedious.  The book does pick up.  The author does a great job of the villain from earlier in the series makes a reappearance instead of creating a whole new cast of characters.  Again the author relies on preexisting faith of the readers to make readers believe that character changes are believable when they aren’t.  The author made sure to tie up as many loose ends as possible without breaking the overall feel of the series.

The Allison Chronicles as a whole series.

The author was true to the time period she chose for her setting.  The author was careful not to deviate from the religious genre.  She towed a fine line keeping romance away from the plot as much as possible and when it was present it was wholesome.  In fact romance not between adults was portrayed as bad or a distraction.  The author did rely heavily on the readers having faith in God already.  The author assumed that readers would already be praying and would be happy Allison was instead of readers being unsure of their faith.  This could potentially alienate readers, make them feel inferior to a character, or make them not pick up the next book. 

I have worked on the following
Writing out possible scenarios for Gwen and Brooke so I could return Haunted Iowa City to the library.
Finished my first ten pages of a script.  It will be showcased in the Omaha’s film festival this summer.  I do still need to make the character write-ups.           


Is there a series you found to rely to heavily on knowledge or beliefs that the reader needed to have before reading to be effective?

Is there a series you think I should do next?